Hi Tom! This is a really nice review and it's great to see your ideas on the sets. One thing that would improve it (as well as fulful the brief better)is the inclusion of a 3rd quote from another source. Maybe type 'The Cabinet of Dr. Caligari' into google books? There are a lot of interesting books delving into the film and its sets on there.
Have you also considered maybe including the quotes as part of your sentence rather than leaving them on their own? This may make your reviews flow a bit better and help back up your points easier.
If you need any help or have any questions feel free to come and ask me! :)
Yep - really content-rich, Tom - and enthusiastic too, but Emma's right in style terms - but you're still not quite citing your sources correctly - they should come in brackets after the quote (source: date) - please refer to the Harvard Citation Guide in your Rough Guide - everything you need to know about referencing correctly is there - please go look and get this last bit of the 'Tom writes reviews' puzzle into place! Encouraging start!
Hi Tom! This is a really nice review and it's great to see your ideas on the sets.
ReplyDeleteOne thing that would improve it (as well as fulful the brief better)is the inclusion of a 3rd quote from another source. Maybe type 'The Cabinet of Dr. Caligari' into google books? There are a lot of interesting books delving into the film and its sets on there.
Have you also considered maybe including the quotes as part of your sentence rather than leaving them on their own? This may make your reviews flow a bit better and help back up your points easier.
If you need any help or have any questions feel free to come and ask me! :)
Yep - really content-rich, Tom - and enthusiastic too, but Emma's right in style terms - but you're still not quite citing your sources correctly - they should come in brackets after the quote (source: date) - please refer to the Harvard Citation Guide in your Rough Guide - everything you need to know about referencing correctly is there - please go look and get this last bit of the 'Tom writes reviews' puzzle into place! Encouraging start!
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