These are looking good Tom! :) Maybe it would be a good idea to work on a script, so you can see exactly the way the action will pan out? And then the next stage will be a draft storyboard. Alongside this, I would suggest continuing to look at ideas for colour/tone, and get some influence maps done to show your thoughts. Keep going, it's very exciting! :D
agreed - but how about giving your own work a bit more 'love?' - if you look at some of your classmate's presentation of work, you'll notice there's a bit more punch and showmanship - and I need to see that kind of sensitivity for your own professional image getting started with you; for example - your actual blog template is, well, a bit dull - even the title is 'white on white'. You may not instinctively understand the importance of thinking about what other people think about you and your work, but you just have to trust me when I tell you that it's hugely important in the creative industries to 'create an impression' and a personal brand - so let's see you raise your game in this area!