PREMISE
The cell cycle told with a visually mechanical theme.
The audience flies through an immense factory that looks to be producing power cells, powered by nuclear-powered nuclei and chromosomes.
LOGLINE
The story centers around the power cells and their journey through the cold, techno-punk style factory that is the human cell replication cycle and it starts off just after the Mitosis phase after the cells have been split up and they are now entering the G1 phase in their resting state.
They journey on a convener belt throughout the cycle, passing the G0 phase for non-dividing cells, a giant incinerator and trough into the mitosis chamber. Inside the cells, claws extend from either end and separate the chromosomes, followed by the cell splitting in half. The cells are carried back to the G1 phase where they are assembled into full cells and cycle completes.
STEP OUTLINE
SCENE NO. 1
CHARACTERS IN SCENE: Cell caps
Enormous hammer-like crushers flatten metal into thin cylinder-like caps while on a conveyor belt going into the G1 phase.
SCENE NO. 2
CHARACTERS IN SCENE: Cells
Complete cells are on a conveyor belt moving across the screen.
SCENE NO. 3
CHARACTERS IN SCENE: Cells, G0 Incinerator
The cells continue to move along the belt while hooks scan and pick up ineffective cells, tossing them into the G0 incinerator.
SCENE NO. 4
CHARACTERS IN SCENE: Cells, Mitosis Chamber
The working cells make their way towards the Mitosis chamber ready to be duplicated.
SCENE NO. 4
CHARACTERS IN SCENE: Cells, Nucleus, Chromosomes
While inside the Mitosis Chamber, the cells duplicate.
SCENE NO. 5
CHARACTERS IN SCENE: Cells, Caps
The cells are carried down to the G1 zone and their construction is completed with a metal cap.
SCRIPT
BLACK SCREEN
A huge metallic crusher slams down onto a conveyor belt.
FLASH INT. BLACK
A second huge metallic crusher slams down onto the conveyor belt.
FADE INT. FACTORY
The crushers are pounding the conveyor belt, crushing and flattening metal into caps and are carried into the bright, fiery, glowing entrance of a huge machine.
A giant crusher slams down into view.
FLASH INT. BLACK
Meanwhile, power cells are carried down another belt towards the G1 zone while in resting state. Metallic claws seem to pluck cells from the belt at random, carrying them off to the G0 incinerator.
As the ineffective cells hurtle down through the tube to the incinerator, the working cells make their way towards the Mitosis chamber ready to be duplicated.
While inside the Mitosis Chamber, hooks extend from either pole of the power cell's inner chambers and pull apart the chromosomes. Robotic hooks unscrew the cell at halfway point and carry them off towards G1.
In G1, the cells are carried down onto the first belt where the robotic claws lower them onto the caps, creating new duplicated cells. The cycle completes.
FADE INT. BLACK.
STORYBOARD
Hey Tom - good to see some more resolved design work on here, but there's something you need to think about. Nowhere in your script is your audience initiated into your metaphor, so what is stopping someone from viewing your film as a bit of sci-fi fluff? What is there in the actual visual content and story structure to introduce us to the metaphor of body-as-factory and where is the annotation of the process coming from - because it's not yet in your images. Take a look at Nat's opening for a good example of orientation - and taking the audience with you.
ReplyDeletehttp://skygecko-nat.blogspot.co.uk/2012/04/commission-storyboard-opening-sequence.html
Also, I'd like to see a bit more evidence of a design process at work here; it seems to me that your plumping for your first instinct, when, in light of what I've pointed out above, perhaps your design work needs to better initiate the audience?
Finally - while it's great to see you ditching your last, rather bland blog template, I can't help feelin that referring to yourself as 'nerdtastic' is a bit cringy and certainly off-putting to anyone seeking to take you seriously. Also, as per the very first instructions re. blogs, you need to ensure that a subtitle 'Ba Hons CG Arts & Animation @ UCA Rochester' is somewhere visible on your template. Maybe have another think about your online identity, Tom - you may indeed be a nerd, but I don't think the world a) cares, or b) wants to know about it. Professionalism is something that doesn't come naturally to you, Tom - because sometimes I suspect you're still living happily in your head - but I need you to think much more carefully about how the real world functions - and how quickly it makes judgements about people. Make sure they're making the right judgement about you!