Re-edited to try and conform with Nat's feedback:
"It's alot better than the previous one, but I think it still needs work. There's something a bit off, perhaps a bit pouty? The bottom lip needs to go in a bit to create the overbite, the top lip needs to be wider than the bottom then go in when it reaches the cheeks. Some more things too, I can see the sections but it might be a little hard to explain"